While I appreciate the effort, this "ad" is rather uninteresting and lacks an emotional hook. If I were to pick an owner-made advertisement to play at the Superbowl, this would be it:
TESLA - Commercial (HD) - YouTube
The reason I love this ad is because it takes us all back to when we were kids. We can relate. It hooks us emotionally. It speaks to those who are young and older (parents), and conveys the sense of awe and wonder I think we all had when we sat in our cars for the first time. It also tells a story.